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本期作文題目：

You are a key account manager for a telecommunications company. You are going to be out of the office for a week.
Write an e-mail of 40-50 words to your client.

*telling them how long you will be away
*explaining where you will be
*suggesting who they can contact while you are away.

Sample:

Dear Mr. Pawlak:

I will be out of the office for ten days from 18th November. I will be attending the Telecommunications Trade Fair in London. While I am away my colleague Marry Richards will be looking after my clients, please contact her with any questions or problems you may have.

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網(wǎng)友作文一：

To: sarah, abc company
Fr: nono, manager for aa telecommunications company
Date: Nov. 7th,2008
subject: about a week leave for business trip

I'd like to tell you that [1] I will be one-week leave for a business trip in England from Nov. 10th to Nov.15th. If you have any problems, don't hesitate to contact with my assistant julie whose extension number is 555 and she will help you to do the operation.
Thanks for your coorperation[2].

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[1]去掉
[2]去掉。 其他地方很好！